Her:
I love it, but then, that's me.
I'd like you to slow down your memoir pieces, give me more concrete detail.
EG: what size were the dragons in your mind? Appearance - Chinese or Celtic or other? All I know are their colours. How did the energy around your house change? What was Andrew's reaction when you first summoned them? What conversations did you have with them, if any?
You've given me a great outline but no juice.
(If you have Clive James' Unreliable Memoirs, go read the early chapters of that to see how he works in detail so you can see him come screaming off that billycart train)
Did anyone else sense the dragons? What were the dragons' reactions to various people who visited your houses?
Btw, your dragon and unicorn poem so belongs with this excerpt.
You might want to have a think about who you're writing this for. Is it family and friends? General audience? Specialised magickal audience? That will change what detail you include, how much explanation, etc.
In your section about becoming a Reiki Master, for instance, I have no real picture of Bill, or Ann. I need characters. (In Eat, Pray, Love, the characters Gilbert builds are very real for the reader, and we have a stake in what happens to them, their triumphs and falls)
So, SHOW ME the dragons. SHOW ME the world you inhabit and the people around you, and how the dragons slid into place, or not. Now that Andrew is gone, for instance, is his protective dragon still with you?
For that matter, what was Andrew at heart? Another dragon? If not, what? How did your dragon self get on with other creatures?
Me:
I guess my audience is the people who, over the years, have asked me to please write about this stuff — most of whom were at least interested in magick and energy. In which case, I can probably stop worrying about being perceived as a nutter or a liar.
Andrew was an angel. I should write a whole piece about that.
Ta; good questions.
I've never read the Unreliable Memoirs, nor Eat, Pray, Love (though saw the movie). It must be time I did.
And, having freed myself from the restrictions of the Life Writing Group's 1500-word limit, I must also free myself from considerations of keeping blog posts short. Might be time to set up the blog in a different style.
You have been a big help. xxxxxx
The upshot of all this:
I'll keep the posting to my memoir blog, and rename it to be 'magickal' rather than merely 'psychic'. (But the posts that got transferred here can stay here too.)
I'll try a layout that gives brief intros to longer posts.
In the writing, I'll go for broke!
Hurrah! We shall go for broke together!
ReplyDeleteWhat fun!
DeleteGo for it, Rosemary. Blogs are meant to be places of complete self-expression, and there is enough ugliness out there in cyberspace. We need your magick! Amy
ReplyDeleteBless you Amy, and thank you.
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